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Taking a Trip

Fri Oct 16, 2009 11:45 PM EDT
entertainment, fiction, challenge, usaf-vet, scott-butki
By USAF Vet-923294
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This is my entry for Scott's Random Words Writing Challenge:

http://sbutki.newsvine.com/_news/2009/09/15/3274026-random-words-exercise-septoct-2009

The elderly man lying in front of me sucked on his oxygen and then pulled the mask aside as his eyes turned in my direction.

"Albert Einstein, Max. Albert Einstein." He said in a horse, but hushed voice.

He had been like this for days. I guess, as he drew near the end he was suffering from dementia. Still, I hated to see my grandfather so discombobulated, but I refused to let him be alone as the end drew near.

"Max, write it down my boy. You must write it down." He said. His face was more serious then I had ever seen it. Yet, it was tinged with a touch of obnoxious pain.

Pulling out the list I had started days before hand, I added it to the list.

"Read it back." He softly said.

"The whole list?" I asked. His eyes widened and he nodded as if his entire life depended on what was written.

"George Carlin, Barbara Walters, Eddie Murphy and Albert Einstein." I read out loud.

"What about the quotes?" He asked. He seemed almost ecstatic that I had gotten all of the names right. So, I continued reading. "Friends are like roses…you have to watch out for the pricks. Author unknown." I said.

"Excellent, my boy. That is what you tell the man in the picture." Grandpa Chester replied.

"What man in what picture?" It was same question I had asked several times over the past few days.

"Watch the video. But remember, he will reply with, 'In the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make. John Lennon and Paul McCartney.'"

"What video is that, Grandpa?"

"You have all the answers in the list, Max."

"Splendid. Sometimes talking to you is like talking to an Ouija board." I thought to myself. But they were words I would never say out loud. Not to Chester.

"What about the other two quotes, Grandpa?" I asked, but my Grandfather had fallen off to sleep even with the beeping of the heart monitor next to his bed.

I walked into the next room to take a break and noticed the video cabinet that was next to the TV. I opened it in hopes of finding something I could watch while Chester slept.

There were only three videos in the huge case and I found it funny that my Grandfather would be so extravagant as to buy a cabinet that would easily hold one-hundred tapes and then only use it for three.

As I picked up the first one, the title caught my eye. "George Carlin – Scuttlebutt, What the….." I read out loud.

I grabbed the next one and read it, "Eddie Murphy – Glock."

The next one said, "Barbara Walters – Ecstatic."

I looked around the cabinet, wondering why there was no tape of Albert Einstein with some random word behind his name.

I had no idea of what they could mean or even if I was supposed to watch them all. Yet, I figured that would.

I turned on the VCR and TV and slide the tape into place. I had always wondered why Grandpa had never gotten a DVD machine or DVR and wondered if these tapes might have had something to do with it.

Soon, I saw Eddie Murphy doing a routine and I turned up the volume. I could here a strange sound in the background of the tape. As I listened it became clearer and was over powering the comedian's stage act. I realized that it was a music note and from my days in a band, I was quickly able to tell it was an E-flat.

Suddenly, I caught movement out of the corner of my eye. As I turned to my left, I saw that a panel on the wall had opened.

Behind the panel was a key pad that was made up of alphabetical digits.

I grew more intrigued and it dawned on me that Chester may not have been as senile as I had first thought. Yet, there were so many unknowns about everything that still did not make sense. What about the man, what about the list and what was the key pad for?

I wondered why the title had included the word "Glock" and after some thought I went to the key pad and punched in G. L. O. C. K. Above the and to the right of the keypad was a row of three darkened lights. The middle one turned green.

I quickly removed the second tape and inserted the Barbara Walters tape. It was similar, but sounded like it was B-Flat. The first position of the three lights turned red. When I punched in the word Ecstatic it flashed to a green. The third tape was a musical note G and the word Scuttlebutt turned the red light green.

I heard a click and a second panel opened. There inside were two small boxes.

I removed the box and carried it into my Granddad's room. He was laying there awake and when he saw what I had in my hand he smiled.

"Max, you must first finish the list." He said in a serious tone. I pulled out the list and waited with pen in hand.

"Write this quote. It is by Martin Luther King. 'I submit to you that if a man has not discovered something that he will die for, he isn't fit to live.' When he says this you must respond with this quote by Albert Einstein. 'Only one who devotes himself to a cause with his whole strength and soul can be a true master. For this reason mastery demands all of a person.' You have that?"

"Yes sir."

"Now open the cherry red wood box first."

I slowly pulled the lid up and saw an odd three dimensional picture. I reached in and my finger went into the photo. I jerked back as if I had been bite. It had tingled at first and then felt as if it were pulling on my whole arm.

I looked inside and the picture looked liked a white haired man in a white coat.

I started to ask him what was going on when I heard a noise behind me. Turning, I saw a man in a long white coat. His hair was even whiter. I dropped the boxes and they clattered to the ground.

"Who…"

"The quote Max, say the quote!" Grandpa yelled.

I looked at my old grandfather and then back at the man. I mumbled the quote and the man responded with the other. Then he gave me the last quote my grandfather had given me and I responded with what my grandpa had told me to.

He reached out his hand as if to handshake and I reciprocated. As he shook my hand he held out a device that looked like a remote control. I took it and then he handed me a VCR tape with the title "Albert Einstein – Dimensions."

"Play the tape. When you hear the musical note D, come back and press the Aux button, then the input button, and then the number 777." The white haired stranger said.

I did as he asked. When I hit the button there was a bright light and a doorway appeared. The man in white helped grandpa out of the bed and helped him through. As he stood there he said, "Your grandfather has many years left. Come and join us in my dimension."

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USAF Vet-923294

This is my entry for the Sept/October random words challenge. I actually managed to us all names, words, and quotes he gave us.

Hope you enjoy it.

  • 3 votes
Reply#1 - Fri Oct 16, 2009 11:48 PM EDT
Scott (Scoop) Butki

very clever. At first I thought you were going to just list each name and quote and I was going to give you a hard time for being sneaky but then you gave it all a nice twist, which i like.

Splendid job.

  • 2 votes
#1.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:15 PM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

The words weren't so hard to work in and some of the names were easy, but the quotes and the rest of the names were more difficult. The easiest way was to give them meaning was to list them for something important and then show the importance.

Glad you like it Scott! ;0 )

  • 3 votes
#1.2 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:26 PM EDT
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Dowser

Good story!

Thanks, Ben, its a good one!

  • 3 votes
Reply#2 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 1:09 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you Dowser. The idea just hit me as I was trying to fit in all the words, quotes and names. LOL

  • 3 votes
#2.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 1:27 AM EDT
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MoCowgirl-1193719

Very imaginative story.

I enjoyed it.

  • 3 votes
Reply#3 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 1:25 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you MoCowgirl! I appreciate your stopping by.

  • 3 votes
#3.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 1:28 AM EDT
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Atsidi

Great story, you should write more.

  • 4 votes
Reply#4 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 1:35 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you. You are too kind. I try to write when the mood over comes me, but many times my mind just doesn't have a clue on what to write about.

  • 4 votes
#4.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 2:09 AM EDT
Dowser

In my case, I think I expect too much of myself. I'm just a piddler, and can come up with good stuff sometimes, but most of the time, I am like you-- what next?

I have never been able to write what other people expect me to write-- like class assignments. And I've written technical reports for so long, I think I've lost my ability to be spontaneous and creative.

Ben, you are a good writer, and I hope that you write more for us all. I enjoy your articles and enjoy getting to know you better. :-)

  • 5 votes
#4.2 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 2:19 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you very much Dowser. I think the big pay off for me, si when folks like you enjoy my stories. ;0 )

  • 3 votes
#4.3 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:01 PM EDT
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LifeTravler

That was one hell of a story. I liked it!

  • 4 votes
Reply#5 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 8:29 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you LT. I enjoyed writing it and I am very happy to know that you like it. ;0 )

  • 4 votes
#5.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:03 PM EDT
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Soovivers

Wow Ben -- I didn't know what was going to happen next or who was going to come in or what was going to come out of he box. Scary!

You made a random word Halloween story - did you know how it was going to end? I never know when I write mine - well except sometimes I know the end but not the start. lols

  • 4 votes
Reply#6 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 9:09 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

I generally start out with playing some ideas in my head. Sometimes I have "seen" the ending and sometimes it comes to me as I write. In this case, I actually had three endings that I could "see." One of those I tried to avoid, because it was a downer.

I had started one story in my head, but it kept falling flat. About a bunch of GI's. I wanted to have a happy ending, but nothing I did made the story come out well.

When I started this one, it just came in spurts as I wrote. I was pretty sure it was this side of an alright story and that is usually a good sign to go ahead and post it.

I have always enjoyed your stories. I like how creative they are and gets your mind moving.

  • 3 votes
#6.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:16 PM EDT
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ANiedlich

Wonderful word painting.

  • 3 votes
Reply#7 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:04 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you very much. I am glad that you enjoyed it.

  • 3 votes
#7.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:17 PM EDT
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MoonCrow

Very nice Vet. Good description touches, a.k.a., cherry red wood box. Now I want a description of what's on the other side of that doorway. :-)

  • 3 votes
Reply#8 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 5:29 PM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Oh! Uh.......sorry, I never peeked throught it. LOL

Thanks for reading my story. I am glad you liked it. ;0 )

  • 3 votes
#8.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 6:16 PM EDT
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Deka Dee Me

Most excellent!

Thank you for such a good read. 'smiles'

  • 1 vote
Reply#9 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 9:25 PM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you Deka Dee! I appreciate you stopping and reading my story. I am glad you enjoyed it! ;0 )

  • 2 votes
#9.1 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 9:37 PM EDT
Deka Dee Me

It kind of had a si-fi aspect to it. The 5th dimension, if you know what I mean.

  • 1 vote
#9.2 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:08 PM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Yes. It was meant that way. One of those parallel universe things.

  • 2 votes
#9.3 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:13 PM EDT
Deka Dee Me

Glad I caught that one!

Now all I have to do is catch a ride on one! LOL

  • 1 vote
#9.4 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:16 PM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

LOL! Me too. ;0 )

  • 2 votes
#9.5 - Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:27 PM EDT
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Perrie

Boy Ben,

You always blow me away. What a great story! I didn't see that ending coming. What goes on in that head of yours? I think you went beyond the call of the challenge!

A most Excellent Trip!

  • 1 vote
Reply#10 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 1:25 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you! I am very glad that you enjoyed it. I actually had about three endings that were churning in my brain, but the Sci Fi ending seem to fit my mood best.

What goes on in that head of yours?

Usually a bunch of things. When I get them sorted out, things seem to click and occasionally it is a decent story. LOL ;0 )

  • 1 vote
#10.1 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 2:36 AM EDT
Perrie

Better than decent....your are modest!

  • 1 vote
#10.2 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 11:16 AM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Thank you. You are very kind. However, I felt that if I had have had more room I could have done much better.

  • 1 vote
#10.3 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 1:29 PM EDT
Perrie

Room to do what? You were working under tough perameters...

Anyway...you sent off grandpa to the ultimate room, LOL...I would say he's never had more room!

  • 1 vote
#10.4 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 1:57 PM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Room to do what?

More description, deeper plot, and better connections to the man in white.

I wanted it to lead folks to believe grandpa was at the end, then surprise them with a happier ending. I think I managed that. I guess I could have taken it in other directions as well.....like a hidden treasure or make the man in white Albert Einstein. That might have been bigger kick in the britches. LOL

  • 1 vote
#10.5 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 2:35 PM EDT
Perrie

I like the man in white being Einstein. But I like the happy ending with the sci-fi finish. I did think he was dying and the light was death....but you defiantly turned it around.

  • 1 vote
#10.6 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 3:01 PM EDT
USAF Vet-923294

Well.....it crossed my mind to make the man "death" or an angel, but that seemed morbid and really did not fit my mood. LOL

  • 1 vote
#10.7 - Mon Oct 19, 2009 4:42 PM EDT
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